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By Hammad Zaidi | August 3, 2010

The first draft of the first screenplay I ever wrote left a lot to be desired. It was a family drama I wrote with a friend of mine in the fall of ’94, just months after I graduated UCLA Film School.  I still remember how sure Mike and I were we’d sell our script. Unfortunately, I also remember our first “big Hollywood meeting” where the overtly polished studio executive’s biggest suggestion for our script was for us to “buy a shovel.” That’s right, “buy a shovel” as in “bury this waste of paper and never dig it up again.” I was shocked, crushed and disillusioned.  I was even more depressed after the second, third and fourth drafts of the script triggered similar responses. This incessantly painful experience was my first (but not last) foray into DEVELOPMENT HELL!!!

For those of you who are wondering what development has to do with distribution, ask yourself what an engine has to do with a car. Like an engine, a solid script makes your film work. But without it, your film will be dead on arrival. This is clearly the case for independent films more so than studio films, because indies don’t have the luxury of a star-studded, $200 million dollar budget that can cleverly mask a really bad script.

After years of being a writer and a producer who has optioned several writers, I’ve compiled certain insights about the development game that may help you.  These insights are for writers with either no sales or limited sales to their credit. Once you’re earning $2 million per screenplay, or have an Oscar prominently placed on your mantle, some of the following suggestions may no longer apply to you.  But, until that earth-shattering, life-changing moment, you may wish to consider the following suggestions.  In an effort to promote clarity, I’ve separated my suggestions into two categories: Preparing Your Script and Submitting Your Script.

1) Preparing Your Script

The Standard Screenplay Length Has Shrunk!
The standard length of a screenplay is now 110 pages for dramas/action/thrillers, and 95-105 for comedies.  Like VHS tapes, 120 page screenplays are a thing of the past.

The First Thing A Development Executive Will Do Is…
Flip to the last page of your screenplay, to see how long it is. If he or she deems it to be too long, they will not read it. Your beloved life’s work will become a doorstop for a few months before it’s recycled.

Don’t List Your Copyright Or WGA Registration Number
Placing these numbers on your cover page is telling the person you’re submitting to that you think they’re going to steal your work.  Talent agencies never list registration numbers on their script cover pages, so you shouldn’t either.

A “Poor Man’s Copyright” Is Not An Actual Copyright
It always amazes me how few new writers register their screenplays with the U.S. Copyright Office. It only costs $40, and takes about 5 minutes of your time. Yet, not doing so will definitely put the rights to your screenplay in jeopardy.  Trust me, mailing your script back to yourself is not a legal copyright.  All you have to do to secure your work is go to the Library of Congress website and look up the Registrar of Copyrights.  Some writers choose to register their work at the WGA (Writers Guild of America). This is an excellent step to take in addition to, not instead of copyrighting your material. Remember, WGA registrations are good for five years, while copyrights are good for 99 years after you go to your final resting place.

Never Submit A First Draft
Ever. All first drafts (including mine) suck. Even Ernest Hemingway once said, “The first draft of anything is s**t.” You’ll thank yourself later for not submitting a first draft, and you won’t even be able to read your own first draft once your script gets into a well-developed form.

Never Put The Draft Number On Your Script
Stating your script is a “first draft” will make your reader think you’re an idiot for submitting a first draft. Conversely, stating your script is a “fourteenth draft” will make your reader think your writing still sucks after fourteen tries, if in fact they don’t like your script.

Don’t Listen to Praise From Your Friends And Family
Family and friends won’t share their true opinion about your work in fear of damaging their relationship with you, so you must take their praise with a pound of salt. However, if you get praise from a qualified film industry professional who had no idea who you were at the time they read your work, then you may be on to something.

Get Coverage
Hire a company to write professional coverage for your script. If your coverage comes back strong, you could have something worthy. But, if it comes back weak, you’ll still benefit from having detailed notes on what to fix. Many screenwriting contests also offer these services.

Recognize Trends Of Opinion About Your Screenplay
If one person hates a specific story aspect or character in your screenplay, then make a mental note of it. But if four, five or six people mention the same problem, then you should change it.

Know Your Audience
One of the keys to making a solid script is to know who you’re making it for. So, when you sit down to scratch out your first set of notes for your future-Oscar winner, ask yourself one simple question: “Who is going to pay $14 to watch this film in a theater?” Make sure you have that question clearly answered before you start writing, so you can craft your story to fit the demands of your audience.

Limit The Number Of Characters
Fewer characters are better, because they are easier to remember.  Once you confuse your reader, you lose any chance of having them buy or champion your script.

Give The Best Lines To Your Lead Character
Never give your best lines to sidekick characters. Remember, “I’ll be back,”  “Go ahead, make my day” and “You had me at hello,” were all delivered by lead characters.

Make Sure Your Characters Talk Naturally
Humans don’t usually converse with each other in complete sentences; so neither should your characters. In fact, if you pay close attention to your next real-life conversation, you’ll notice that you and the person you’re speaking with often cut each other off. Conversational dialogue delivered in short sentences will read better on paper and play better on screen.

Dovetail Your Characters
If you find you have too many characters who do too little in your story to matter, then combine (aka dovetail) those characters into a fewer number of more meaningful characters.

Don’t Fall into the Gender Trap
Women don’t talk differently than men in real life, so they shouldn’t do so in your script. Of course characters, whether they are male or female, will speak differently. But don’t have your characters talk differently just because they are female.

Don’t Fall Into The Age Trap
Thanks to the Internet age we live in, kids don’t talk like kids anymore (unless they’re really young).

Don’t Fall Into The Indie Filmmaker Trap
This is a crucial element of this development process. Here’s what you want to avoid:

1)   You write a script you love, so you send it to a few places.

2)   Those places say “no,” so you send it to a few more places.

3)   The new places say “no,” leaving you frustrated.

4)   Instead of rewriting, you make your film yourself.

5)   You risk your credit cards, car and other assets to do so.

6)   Two years later, you have a completed film – but it probably has a limited cast and a low production value.

7)   You send your film to the same places that rejected your script two years earlier.

8)   More often than not, they will reject your film, because you never bothered to change your screenplay.

The above sequence happens far more than it should. In my office alone, we get pitched a countless number of indie films that will probably never find a distributor. I often wonder if anyone told those filmmakers how limited their options would be after they finish their film, or if those filmmakers knew their film’s fate all along and wanted to make the picture anyway.

2) Submitting Your Script

Never Send Out Unsolicited Material
Mailing your script to a person or company, who never asked to read it, will do two things; a) burn your bridge with them b) get your script returned unread.  Always contact the person or place you’d like to submit to. They’ll probably require you to have an agent or entertainment attorney submit your screenplay to them. Due to the legalities, writers usually can’t submit their own work.

Submission Releases Are A Great Tool To Help Get Read
In the event that you can’t get an agent or entertainment attorney to submit your screenplay, you can contact the company you’re trying to submit to and ask them if they’ll accept a “signed submission release.” A submission release basically waives your right to sue the entity that would be reviewing your work, in the event they are developing or develop something in the future with similar elements to your screenplay.  Don’t worry, if they truly rip-off your script, having you sign a submission release won’t free them from legal action.

Keep An Open Mind During Development Meetings
So your script as about a 22 year-boy, but a development executive wants you to switch it to a 34 year-old woman. Listen to what they have to say before you shoot down their idea. Who knows, maybe they have an actor in mind that would love your script. One of the other reasons development executives may suggest radical changes, is because they’re trying to gage how easy you are to work with. In short, the more you say “never” to suggestions, the more you’ll hear “never” from them about buying your script.

Submit Your Screenplay To Screenwriting Contests
There are several screenwriting contests out there, but far fewer credible ones that have withstood the test of time and have the respect of the motion picture industry professionals. The contests that will get you noticed if you win them include: The Nicholl Fellowship, Chesterfield, Sundance, Slamdance, Zoetrope, Bluecat (very cool because every script submitted will receive notes back to the writer) Scriptapalooza, Script Pimp and The Austin Heart of Film.  You should do in-depth research on each contest and consider submitting to the one(s) you jive with.

*On a side note, I personally created a screenwriting contest called “Script Accessible,” which I currently house at the Slamdance Screenwriting Competition. “Script Accessible” is for writers with disabilities who are free to write about whatever they wish, as well as non-disabled writers who have a disabled lead character in their script. Should you fall within either of those two guidelines, and are interested in submitting, please contact Slamdance directly.

Be Patient With Feedback
It’s highly unlikely that the person reading your script will do so in a short amount of time. It will take at least several weeks, if not a few months for them to give you feedback. Contacting them weekly (or God forbid) daily isn’t going to make them read your work any quicker.  All it will do is piss them off.  You may want to contact them about every three weeks to check in on the status of your screenplay. Just remember the task of carving out an hour and a half to two hours to read a new writer can take a while to schedule.

Always Have At Least A Few Different Scripts Ready
What if the film professional you’re meeting with likes you, but doesn’t think your script idea is right for them? If you have a few more script ideas ready to go, you can submit them instead. But, if you only have one idea, you’ll be seen like a one-trick pony and you’ll lose your contact to the professional.

Development Hell is a necessary evil to endure for your script to reach the heights you need it to. The journey is treacherous and oftentimes painful, but the results from a well-crafted screenplay can be wildly enjoyable.  Creating a great script will allow you to attach better talent, get a bigger distributor (way bigger than me) and ultimately allow you to go bionic.

They say good things come to those who wait, but remember, great things come to those who rewrite!

Thanks for lending me your eyes, and I’ll see you next week!

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  1. Brian VanGeem says:

    Well said, Hammad. Wish all the best for you and your company. This is exactly the kind of intel I need to launch one of my films. Great insight to such a challenging industry. Keep up the good work. Contact me if you’re ever in need of a new or ambitious project.

    All the best, and even better

    Brian VanGeem
    President of Conquest Productions

  2. Hammad Zaidi says:

    Good job Hammad

  3. dan shannon says:

    I enjoyed your overview of indie filmmaker development hell. At the other end of the spectrum, the sales side I represent indie producers for worldwide sales. I can say I meet many, many indie producers at film markets with a completed picture, and high hopes of cashing out in the market…often no cast, technical challenges on deliverables, sub-standard artwork, and very often a weak trailer.

    Your advice is sound, and its important for producers to surround themselves with qualified opinions on how to structure their scripts and their overall offering for sales success.

    I meet too many who have really put themselves in harms way, in the sense that they will never get their money back, or even a respectable % of it…there is so much product in the marketplace, its a very unforgiving place.

    Dan Shannon

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